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There's no doubt that you are able to evoke emotion with your writing. However, I was disappointed because, with such captivating writing skills, I couldn't deny the observation that your characterizations, particularly for pretty much all the Decepticons, other than TC, were unjustifiably over-the-top and unrealistic, reduced to two-dimensional plot devices for the sole purpose of giving TC a reason for defecting.
This essay appears to be heavily biased towards the Autobots. You claim that "The Decepticons have very little in the way of strategic diversity, rather, their ranks are simply filled with soldiers, the majority of whom although are very powerful, excellent warriors, are not highly intelligent, many of them have doubts as to the war, the Decepticon cause, and their places in it." Yet an in-depth study of the Decepticons reveals quite the opposite, in fact; many are multi-skilled and quite adaptable in their own right, with a strong sense of purpose and belonging, but that would be a topic for another essay entirely. This is just one of the many blatant assumptions about the Decepticons presented in this essay with no solid evidence or examples to back them up. Even the outlined list of Autobots are the most pacifistic individuals one finds within their ranks; so they are less war-like... how does this help the argument that the Decepticons can never win because of their apparant lack of "strategic diversity", whch is what your main argument is based on? You'll have to do better than that.
I spent time reading this so I thought I should leave my thoughts on it. It's got a good variety of emotion, action and back story, but ultimately falls short on delivery. It gets confusing at times, and it is hard to understand the reasons for some of the characters' interactions and attitudes toward the heroine. Speaking of which, my biggest issue with this story lies with Primary herself. She is a highly idealized character with very unrealistic abilities who not only elicits an uncanny admiration and respect from most (if not all) of the other characters, regardless of faction, rank or ability, but she also, essentially, saves the day (many times). Unfortunately she is the quintessential Mary Sue, and I really cannot stand Mary Sues as they always ruin what would otherwise have been a decent story.
This was an enjoyable read and one of the best Thundercracker fics of all time, in my opinion. In such a short story, you managed to convey his personality and essence perfectly, without the need to over-state it or convolute it. TC's forgiveness and Bluestreak's wanting to reciprocate in kind was, for me, the best part of this ficlet. The reactions from the rest of the Autobots were also a nice touch and, all in all, it was nicely realistic throughout. Rating of 10.
Love this very funny story!