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I was quite fond of this story and I thought that the characterization and dialogue was handled pretty well. The only thing I would have wanted to see more of would be the nitty-gritty details of the ship. You did a good job describing the various traps, but I think it would have added a lot more to the atmosphere if you could have gone into more detail about the ship overall. Aside from that minor detail, good job!
Very cartoony, which -- when CONSCIOUSLY trying to be achieved by the author -- works very well. Flows well, and Rodimus gets good lines! Another staple of the cartoon: good dialogue. :) And may I say that the passage about the not-so-graceful escape just cracked me up?
The author here achieves her goal of writing a plausible third season episode with the depth permitted by prose writing, without sacrificing the pace, the action and the wit of the cartoon. All five canon characters are well-written. Although writing cliches are used, they aren't cop-outs or shortcuts, but perfectly reasonable extensions of the characters and of the situation. The prose is smooth and conveys the setting well. Excellent work!
This story had me enthralled! It had a great "third-season" feel to it, as if I was watching the action instead of reading about it. I enjoyed the creativity with which the Autobots' most private fears were brought to life. However, I felt that one element was missing. Ultra Magnus was such an important part of the post-movie era, yet he was conspicuously absent. I wonder what his worst fear would be? Failing those who rely on him, perhaps. Something that would lead to the annihilation of the Autobots and a Decepticon victory. There aren't enough Rodimus fics out there, and I really enjoyed seeing the young leader stand up to a judgmental version of Optimus Prime. I would love to read more fics like this one!
This is definitely just like a GOOD episode of Season Three as a cartoon. That's how I like my fafics--when they flow just like an actual episode so you can envision it on the TV screen, watching it play out. I loved it! And I HAD to chuckle at some of the humor. It was great.