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Reviewer: Dropzone Signed [Report This]
Date: 06/05/13 - 08:37 pm Title: Chapter One

Great but use more pronouns, saying "Jazz" or "the decepticon" over and over again make the story repetitive, far too many fanfics suffer from proper noun syndrome. But other than that keep up the good work.

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